I'm not sure where an editor would find a problem with it. Lot's of pieces had to fall in place to make it work, but why couldn't they? A fun little set of building blocks. And you saved the girl! Well done, hero. Yes, you can write these in your sleep.
Implausible? Who cares? It was a ton of fun to read... I can think of more than a couple of pubs that would have taken it (the non-paying kind probably). I love these kinds of frantic, wildly comedic pieces.
I'm not sure where an editor would find a problem with it. Lot's of pieces had to fall in place to make it work, but why couldn't they? A fun little set of building blocks. And you saved the girl! Well done, hero. Yes, you can write these in your sleep.
Implausible? Who cares? It was a ton of fun to read... I can think of more than a couple of pubs that would have taken it (the non-paying kind probably). I love these kinds of frantic, wildly comedic pieces.